Read and read aloud

No matter how many times you hear it in your head, your work sounds different when you hear the sound of your words.
One of my writing groups focuses almost exclusively on the sounds of our efforts. When we read, we hear the too-long sentences, the oft-repeated words, the misplaced modifiers and more.
Reading out loud is the top tip on this list, but it’s not the only good one.

20 Simple Tips That Will Dramatically Improve Your Writing | inspirationfeed.com

http://inspirationfeed.com/articles/blogging/20-simple-tips-that-will-dramatically-improve-your-writing/

Everyone needs an editor

If you are done with your book, it’s time for an editor. Whether you publish traditionally or independently, you’ll want someone with fresh eyes to take a close look at your work.
One thing you’ll want is someone who respects your voice, but who can still find problems you may have missed.
Here are some tips for meeting your next best friend.

How to Find an Independent Editor to Review Your Work – Writer’s Circle
http://writerscircle.com/2014/09/how-to-find-an-independent-editor-to-review-your-work.html